Requesting Constructive Criticism & Feedback

[BlaqueSaber]

Hello,

I'm a huge fan (and subscriber) of the Red Panda as well as countless other podcasts and audio drama. I've been lurking on this forum (sticking close to the decoderringtheater board) for quite a while.

I've recently begun writing audio drama scripts and I would really appreciate any feedback or constructive criticism (good or bad) that you may have to offer:

http://blaquesabers.posterous.com/private/vGGovCrkyG#

Thank you for your time.

Caine
BlaqueSaber

[JulieH]

I apologize for not getting onto this, been busy etc. Still plan to, but don't know when.

But wanted to bump it, hoping to bring it to everyone's attention.

[Jack J Ward]

	Quote:	BlaqueSaber
	Hello, I'm a huge fan (and subscriber) of the Red Panda as well as countless other podcasts and audio drama. I've been lurking on this forum (sticking close to the decoderringtheater board) for quite a while. I've recently begun writing audio drama scripts and I would really appreciate any feedback or constructive criticism (good or bad) that you may have to offer: http://blaquesabers.posterous.com/private/vGGovCrkyG# Thank you for your time. Caine BlaqueSaber

Sorry man.. It's NANOWRIMO time this month so I've had my head filled with novel writing. Will try to check this out when I get a chance.

[irish]

Well if you don't mind input from someone who is purely a listener, at least in terms of radio plays, I like what I've read so far.
You do need to go over it for punctuation though.
The thing that i like is that at least up to the bit I read, you let the effects speak for themselves.
eg "gunshots and teleportation" you don't have a character tell what's happening
Although I'm interested in how the teleportation aspect is gonna be put across.
good dialogue.
M